Tuesday, May 22, 2012

Her Noise

Here's my entry for Cherie Reich's 2nd Annual Flash Fiction Blogfest! It's called "Her Noise." Hope you enjoy it. 

Lightning flashed from her throat, a primal shriek-song, her body slick and strained, her fingernails piercing my palm. It was terrible and magnificent. My ears worshipped it. My whole life was humbled before it. I don’t deserve to be a father, I thought.  

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28 comments:

  1. Thank you for entering my 2nd Annual Flash Fiction Blogfest! The six finalists will be announced on Friday, May 25th. I will further comment on your entry on Thursday.

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    1. Haha, thanks! My blog is all flash fiction, so I get a lot of practice. :)

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  3. "Terrible and magnificent." My personal experience says, yes, that describes it perfectly.

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    1. Thanks! Glad to hear I described it well.

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  4. Wow, thanks everyone! I appreciate it.

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    1. So do I. It's also pretty great that what I suspect is my shortest-ever blog entry has more comments than any other entry. :)

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  6. Oh wow, a very short fiction, and wonderful too!! Great ending.

    Andrea

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  7. Great imagery! "It was terrible and magnificent," though you used it to describe her shriek, is the perfect description of giving birth, IMO. :-)
    Some Dark Romantic

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    1. Thank you! I'm glad you liked it.

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  8. Very interesting piece! Great imagery. I particularly liked the line “My ears worshipped it.”

    I'll announce the finalists tomorrow.

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    1. Sounds awesome. Thanks again for having the contest! Writing the story was really fun.

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  9. And to think I thought I'd have one of the shortest entries. :-P

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    1. Honestly, it ended up being a little shorter than I expected, too. :)

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  10. Great description, seems very real and the right length for that kind of moment.

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  11. To the point, nothing more, nothing less. Sums up the terrifying and humbling moment perfectly. :)

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